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Chains...
Chains that binds
Your emotions to everyone
Tugging at your wrist
Pulling you along with the others
Feel the pain
Feel the burn
While everyone stares at you
With their eyes wide open
Full of sympathy
Wondering around
As you march down the fields
Alongside the unforgiven

March down the field
Through grassy plains
Treacherous asphalt
And the bodies of the dead
Bones desceased into the ground
But you've noticed
A crackling, ringing sound
As you step over them
The chains around them
That looked like the same
As the one that's pulling
You through this hell
Called life

Follow along the path
In which so many have taken
Stretch your arms out
Hook the chain on
And follow the path of the broken
Don't let your eyes wonder
Don't stop walking
Don't even talk
It doesn't matter anymore
You're around others like yourself
As everyone else shows pity on you
And the person in front
And the person behind
And everyone on that long chain
Of the dead
What is this, I don't even...

My thoughts, out on paper T-T'' I know I suck at poems and literature, but meh.
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HyperActiveEmo205 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
I think this is wonderful! It has a message that is easy to find and thats all that matters to me. The great use of words is just the strawberry on top!
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Vetom Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
..I didn't think it was that good, really XD
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HyperActiveEmo205 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
YEAH! It's brilliant!
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Vetom Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
Well thanks~ ^^
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HyperActiveEmo205 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
welcome!
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TheNinjaLink Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Student
lol
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TheNinjaLink Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Student
I don't know why people always say they suck; They've got neat stuff XD
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Vetom Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
....Maybe because I'm not use to writing poems and I'm embarrassed on posting it ^^''
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Fishlover Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, that's really good! o.o
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Vetom Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
XD'' really?
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